Teh Wozzinator

ok, here's the prologue (sorry, i'll probably mention things other people said, because i didn't read the other reviews) Prologue Ah, death. The thing many fear because they think it ...

This was great! I agree with Gryphon that it flows like a poem and I noticed no mistakes. It was beautifully written. I liked the mentions of the orchestra and ...

wow, the very end of that was greatly descriptive. amazing. as usual, very, very, very good. if you finish this, you must take it to a publisher. it's awesome. nothing ...

I know, I know. Another work by me. You're all getting sick of it, I know you are. Sure we are, Jabber, but no one except me would actually tell ...

He paces his quarters, One hand on his belt. The other, beside him, Gloved in fine lion's pelt. The firelight warms him, Though not to the core. He sobs with ...

this was was short, so not much to edit, i don't think, and i have to go eat lunch, but i'm curious...are they foxes? you never explain anything but "fox ...

wow. you are a great, great writer. i just did a really long review, so i don't have time for a long one here, but i will say this: you ...

hey, here's a couple of tips when writing on YWS (i know from experience because i did these same things). a lot more people will read if you put a ...

First reaction: EEP! I wasn't playing neopets... honest! Second reaction: Wait... this is in narrative poetry. Weird... Third reaction: *click* Fourth reaction: ...wtf? Fifth reaction: I'm married! So

"And with a whimper only it can hear, the world ends." i loved the first line, but the second just kinda dropped with a thunk . you need a longer ...

"Night to me is scary Night isn't very nice It takes away what we love the most Which is daytime. " the first two sentences were great, had awesome rhythm, ...

Chapter One Part II “Ya!” A familiar cry sent a cold sensation up Aedomir’s spine and goose bumps erupted up his arm. As he turned around, he feared the sight ...

wow. your writing style is great. are you really only fourteen?? you've got a great story here (and yes, PG-13 fits), and with a little grammar clearing up, i think ...

what stabbing thing are you talking about?? oh, wait...did you already edit it out? ok... i was really confused about that. anyways, i thought that it was interesting...it's a little ...

wow, it's getting creepier than the other parts i've read...there are some grammatical errors i noticed when Yazra's talking to the little boy, but i don't have time to give ...